That's not bad. Smooth. But as a former cinematographer I would of liked to see some camera moves , something similar to what I've done in this music video I shot
https://youtu.be/f5evR6rw9Ik . I know sometimes it's easier said than done, my Porsche videos I do pretty amateur style
www.youtube.com/amazingquirks as I try to focus on what I'm doing and don't have help like I would on a film set bit just sharing